Monday, March 8, 2010

MAGPIE TALES TUESDAY


OBITUARY

LONG STANDING friendship
ends.
BITING remarks,
LONG-winded conversation.
Loud MOUTH,
lies told---
NOSE GROWS.
NEEDLE NOSE
pliers
pull out love
TOOTH
by
TOOTH!
Truth
be told:
It hurts
to be BIT
by such a sharp MOUTH.
CHEWED up.
SPIT out.
No discussion.
No explanation.
Only
accusations.
CHEWED up,
SPIT out.
SNAPPED SHUT.
JAWS CLENCHED.
Oh bitch! [you] Teri.

10 comments:

  1. what a unique take on the prompt...needle nose pliers pulling out love tooth by tooth is quite teh image...

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  2. Brilliant. There is actually someone who came to my mind for this one. You took the words right out of my mouth, Teri! ;^)

    I love the line

    lies told---
    NOSE GROWS.
    NEEDLE NOSE
    pliers
    pull out love
    TOOTH
    by
    TOOTH!

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  3. Love the flow and linking words in this! Excellent!

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  4. Its like a stream of consciousness this and it works very well. Lovely rhythm.

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  5. Strong no, STRONG emotion here!!
    Don't ya love how poetry affords us that avenue?
    rel

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  6. Yep, I know who you're talking about!!! That cruel pair of pliers were used on me as well.

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  7. Ditto to Vicki's comments..... nose grows needle nose, Pull out tooth by tooth OUCH! A very biting poem..

    New to your blog but do love the banner you choose. From your garden? That banner would make an interesting magpie tale -- or just an interesting tale.

    Joanny

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  8. I have a feeling writing this was quite a catharsis! Strong words!

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  9. http://adivashammer.com/archives/1274

    Oh here you are! i too did the magpie tale (above)

    And you have such a gritty look into the piece. Your words evoke our emotions...snapping the strings and pounding the drums of our inner selves!
    Pow.

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